Sunday, November 24, 2019

Noirvember - Return to Sender

1 - First four panels are from the same framing of looking out a suburban house's open front door at the hoodlum standing on the steps. It's night time and the light from the house is bathing the woman standing there. She's wearing a balaclava, which obscures her face, a beat-up leather jacket, gloves, and a pair of cargo pants. She has one hand up and scratching the side of her head to try to hide how nervous she is. She grimaces awkwardly.

WOMAN (1): This is embarrassing.

WOMAN (2): I was nervous. Read the address wrong.

2 - Repeat framing. The woman holds a small piece of paper, maybe gesturing at flipping it 180 degrees or some arrows drawn to show this happening.

WOMAN (1): Realized too late I had the paper upside down.

WOMAN (2): And with your house being 616...

3 - Repeat framing. The woman drops her hands to her side and lets out a big breath of air, sighing. Either draw the air coming out and / or add in a little {sigh} in lettering.

NO COPY

4 - Repeat framing. The woman is still awkward / nervous, but she holds out a hand palm-up, hoping to receive something from her interlocutor.

WOMAN: I guess what I'm trying to say is, I'm terribly sorry about the window, but could I have that back?

5 - Switch angles to reveal the terrified homeowner who is holding the brick the woman errantly threw through his window. He reaches out to give it back, terrified he might be in danger.

NO COPY

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