Wednesday, November 6, 2019

Noirvember - Fairest of Them All

This page takes place in a public men's washroom that has individual mirrors for each sink. The mirrors also have hinges. This is relevant because every panel will be a fixed shot looking at the same mirror, showing its reflection (which will change depending the hinges' angle). The mirror we're looking at also potentially has a crack in it near the bottom, although this isn't necessary if it would impact readability.

1 - The initial reflection shows some of the stalls, although we're at a bit of an angle, so it's not head on. They are looking worse for wear - a fight has clearly taken place here. The edge stall to the panel's right has fallen over and its door has been caved in. Water is seeping in from the right side of the panel. There's debris and patches of blood littered about. On top of all this, a woman's hand reaches up from the right-bottom of the panel and grabs the mirror from the bottom, adjusting it. This is Riley. Her hand is red and cut up, further evidence of the fight. A weak moan comes from bottom-left off-panel.

MOAN (off-panel, weakly): ugh...

2 - Repeat mirror, except it's been moved and now shows the urinals. They're wall hanging ones and, while there's some blood along them, one is broken (apparently from blunt force) and is the source of the leaking water. Riley stands over the sink, her head hanging down from exhaustion. Her hair is wet and matted to her head and neck. She spits blood into the sink. Note: the mirror should have some blood on it where her hand held it in the previous panel.

SFX: ptuh!

3 - Repeat mirror. Riley looks up. She has a still bleeding cut above her eyebrow and one along her cheek. Her nose is visibly broken and bleeding down her mouth and onto her shirt (I was going to say not dissimilar to Andrew W.K., but maybe the touchstone I actually want is Becky Lynch). She is defiant, again, not unlike Becky Lynch. Her clothes are ripped and have some blood on them - not all of it hers. The urinal continues to leak water in the background.

NO COPY

4 - Riley bares her teeth to take a look at them. They are also covered in blood. Maybe she runs a finger / thumb along them to assess the damages.

NO COPY

5 - Riley heads off and to the left, pushing the mirror back into its "home" position against the wall.

NO COPY

6 - Riley is gone, but in the mirror's reflection, we now see the rest of the toilet stalls and two men are lying in a heap in the water that has now seeped over. They are battered and broken and the source of the moaning from panel 1.

NO COPY

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