Thursday, November 21, 2019

Noirvember - On Edge

1 - Elsie and Denise stand in Denise's kitchen. Elsie aims a gun at Denise, angry and nervous. Denise stands on the other side of a kitchen counter, looking at her calmly. Denise's hands are below the countertop, not visible.

ELSIE: Denise, show me your hands!

DENISE: Elsie, calm down. How long have we known each other?

ELSIE: That's why I want your hands!

2 - Denise raises her hands. Elsie relaxes a little.

DENISE (1): Of course.

DENISE (2): We're all friends here.

3 - Denise tentatively comes out from around the counter, hands lowering in a conciliatory gesture.. Elsie is not loving this.

DENISE: Let's talk this out.

4 - Elsie raises the gun again, keeping the space between her and Denise. Denise brings the hands back up, her back now towards the doorway to the living room (but still facing the reader).

ELISE: You stay away from me!

DENISE: It's clear I've done something to upset you.

5 - From behind Denise, hands still raised. Having them up brings the bottom of her shirt above her waistband, which reveals the knife that she has stashed in it. Elsie still hasn't seen it, but keeps the gun raised, sure Denise is up to something.

DENISE: Let's figure out what that sticking point is.

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