Thursday, November 28, 2019

Noirvember - The Best Laid Plans

1 - Jo is lying on the ground, apparently unconscious. It's not entirely clear where she is, but she's on some concrete. She's cut up and bruised a bit, with some rips in her clothing. No other hints as to what's going on are visible.

NO COPY

2 - Repeat panel. Jo spasms a bit as she starts coughing.

JO: {koff! koff!}

3 - Closer in on Jo. She's up into a sitting position, holding her phone loosely in one hand. She looks tired and disappointed.

JO (quietly): dang

4 - On Jo, now talking into her phone.

JO: Hey, bad news.

5 - Pull out to reveal that Jo is nearby a neighbourhood power station, with some power lines, generators, etc. A car (that she was recently driving before jumping out of it) has smashed through the fence and crumpled into one of the generators. While the car looks rather worse for wear, beyond a possible minor dent, the generator seems to be fine.

JO: We need a new plan B

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