Friday, April 8, 2016

Five Page Stories - Off the Clock - Page 3

Start from the beginning.

1 - The luchador businessmen hold their umbrellas out in front of them, as if they are about to draw a sword from a scabbard (mostly because that's what they're about to do).

CAPTION (KENDRA): Of course...

LEADER: You may think your glib remarks clever...

2 - Insert panel. Close on a sword blade being drawn from its umbrella scabbard.


3 - The luchador businessmen stand with swords drawn, ready to strike.

LEADER: But we've come with something sharper than your wit.

CAPTION (KENDRA): The fun can be short lived.

4 - Kendra strikes a pose as if she's ready to fight, one hand out to the side.

KENDRA: Well, if you put it that way...

5 - Insert panel of Kendra's hand pulling down on the bus stop request cord. Maybe some speed lines or torque to emphasize how hard she's pulling.

SFX: Ding!

6 - On Kendra, still pulling on the cord. She looks confident.

KENDRA: That's my cue to leave.

7- On the group as a whole. Kendra stands to one side, looking out the window; the luchador businessmen stand to the other, still at the ready. The "Stop Requested" sign is now lit up. Everyone looks kind of uncomfortable.


8 - Repeat panel. Kendra returns her attention to the group and scratches the back of her head, an awkward smile on her face. The luchador businessmen look at each other, unsure of what to do for the moment.

KENDRA: I'd really hoped that would work.

Next page.

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