Monday, October 16, 2017

InkTober - Burn After Reading - Page 4

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As discussed previously, we're working from Simon Fletcher's InkTober prompts, specifically the fourth group of four from the Steampunk list - The Good Copper, The Bad Copper, The Doc, and The Illusionist.

Page 4

1 - On Ferand, lying on his back amidst the rubble from the ceiling collapsing. He has a big ol' piece of rubble lying across his ribs / stomach, and it's crushed him pretty good. He looks to be in some serious pain / on the way out.

CYNTHIA (off-panel): Fer!

2 - Cynthia is kneeling next to Ferand's head, trying to reassure him. She looks really shaken; he looks like he's fading but determined to get a point across before all is said and done. Frame so the debris killing him is off-panel and not visible.

CYNTHIA: Stay with me!

FERAND: Cynth.

CYNTHIA: I've already called for medevac.

FERAND: Cynth!

3 - On Ferand's hand point at Cynthia's still glowing antenna. Her eyes look up towards it guiltily.

FERAND: This is on you.

4 - On Cynthia's antenna, now no longer glowing.

FERAND (off-panel) (trailing off): Make it right.

5 - Close on Ferand's hand, now lying on the floor, lifeless. The white rabbit from page 1 (now with a generous splash of red all over him) is nibbling / sniffing at his finger again.

CYNTHIA: ...Fer?

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