Saturday, November 23, 2019

Noirvember - Part-Time Job

I picture the script with panels 1 through 6 in two small rows at the top, with the background repeating and only Aaron / the activity on the panels changing, with the final two panels taking up the rest of the page.

1 - Aaron stands in a nondescript hallway leaning against the wall next to a nondescript closed door. Aaron is a big guy with a hulking physique. He's some scars around his face and a nose that's been broken a few times. He's got some heavily tattooed arms, and while we can't see it from the muscle shirt he wears, it looks like the ink continues onto his torso. His hands are wrapped like a boxer. He looks towards the door, a nervous look on his face. He doesn't know what to do with his hands.
LETTERING NOTE: I'd like if a word balloon could come from within the door to show that people are inside talking, but that it's muffled from the door, so what they're actually saying is muffled.

2 - Repeat panel. Aaron looks at his hands, maybe checking the wraps to make sure they're properly set.

NO COPY

3 - Repeat panel. Aaron kind of looks away from the door.
LETTERING NOTE: The muffled talk continues.

4 - Repeat panel. Aaron turns back to look at the door in shock due to the loud shouting and smack he hears within.
LETTERING NOTE: The dialogue from within would start indistinct and move to audible due to the shouting.

MAN (from within): [indistinct] show you!

SFX: whmp!

5 - Repeat panel. There's a pause in the talk from within. Aaron still looks in shock at what he's heard.

NO COPY

6 - Repeat panel. Aaron is still staring at the doorway, the shocked look mingled with embarrassment as the door opens and a man leans out.

MAN: You're up.

AARON: Y-you sure?

MAN: Did I stutter?

7 - Inside the room, looking towards the door. Aaron is coming in, checking his wraps once again. Despite his large size, he looks small, uncertain, and apologetic. The room is dark, with the main light coming from the doorway. Two men (including the one who leaned out in the previous panel) are leaving the room towards said door behind Aaron.

AARON: Sorry about all this.

8 - 180 flip to reveal a man tied to a chair with his mouth duct taped. He has a cut near his eye from where he was just hit - it's bleeding slightly. He's wearing a rumpled suit and looks very scared. Aaron's shadow looms over him.

AARON: You should have told them what they wanted to know.

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